Beside the several things that =Lolly-the-legend pointed out, there are a couple of other things that you could look into.
First of all, the hand is a tad too big for a girl her age. She looks pretty young to me, yet the hand looks like it's an adult hand! Try making the hand smaller, and the fingers thinner and longer. Also, remember to take into account the three segments of the finger when drawing the hand. It's virtually impossible for fingers to be that straight, so try relaxing them a little by adding in the three segments.
The perspective of the shoulders are a bit off. The shoulders should be drawn at an angle where her left shoulder looks "higher up" on the page than her right shoulder. After changing the angle of the shoulders, you can emphasize the perspective even more by changing the perspective of the tank-top to that of the shoulders as well. Tell me if this doesn't make sense, and I'll try to clarify a bit more...I'm not very good at explaining things.
Those were the main things I noticed when I saw this. Everything else is done pretty well. The character is gorgeous, and you captured her expression nicely. Good job! And I hope this critique helped :]
Beside the several things that =Lolly-the-legend pointed out, there are a couple of other things that you could look into.
First of all, the hand is a tad too big for a girl her age. She looks pretty young to me, yet the hand looks like it's an adult hand! Try making the hand smaller, and the fingers thinner and longer. Also, remember to take into account the three segments of the finger when drawing the hand. It's virtually impossible for fingers to be that straight, so try relaxing them a little by adding in the three segments.
The perspective of the shoulders are a bit off. The shoulders should be drawn at an angle where her left shoulder looks "higher up" on the page than her right shoulder. After changing the angle of the shoulders, you can emphasize the perspective even more by changing the perspective of the tank-top to that of the shoulders as well. Tell me if this doesn't make sense, and I'll try to clarify a bit more...I'm not very good at explaining things.
Those were the main things I noticed when I saw this. Everything else is done pretty well. The character is gorgeous, and you captured her expression nicely. Good job! And I hope this critique helped :]